Great piece. Great sort of twist at the end. Maybe it's because I, regardless that I haven't had any children yet, but a Women's Studies minor at university, completely understand where the story is coming from, I don't feel the explanation at the end was at all necessary. It was well clear in the story. Enjoyed it. Thanks.
its a first draft and I prob should go and dust it of a bit more.
and yes other commenters.. your body knows what to do.. you just need to trust it...
PJ - I'd love to think that conversations over a birthing woman was rare.. perhaps they are in your part of the world - but here in Aust, we are fighting for the right to birth at home....yeah - don't get me started...
The reveal halfway through the story is pretty great, and I appreciated the layers of meaning in the doctor's conversation. It really is annoying until the reveal. Beyond that, your description is is very good and I could almost see the scene. Excellent, Annie.
Don't worry, Icy, your body knows what to do when the time comes :-)
Annie - This is a very nice piece and I know that some women indeed have birth experiences where they are not part of the conversation. I like to think that's getting more and more rare. Good descriptions throughout and gradual reveal of who the mommy in question is
Great piece. Great sort of twist at the end. Maybe it's because I, regardless that I haven't had any children yet, but a Women's Studies minor at university, completely understand where the story is coming from, I don't feel the explanation at the end was at all necessary. It was well clear in the story. Enjoyed it. Thanks.
libbywalkup almost 3 years ago
oh gosh.. thanks Icy!! *blush*
its a first draft and I prob should go and dust it of a bit more.
and yes other commenters.. your body knows what to do.. you just need to trust it...
PJ - I'd love to think that conversations over a birthing woman was rare.. perhaps they are in your part of the world - but here in Aust, we are fighting for the right to birth at home....yeah - don't get me started...
AnnieEvett almost 3 years ago
*crosses her legs*
The reveal halfway through the story is pretty great, and I appreciated the layers of meaning in the doctor's conversation. It really is annoying until the reveal. Beyond that, your description is is very good and I could almost see the scene. Excellent, Annie.
jen_b almost 3 years ago
Don't worry, Icy, your body knows what to do when the time comes :-)
Annie - This is a very nice piece and I know that some women indeed have birth experiences where they are not part of the conversation. I like to think that's getting more and more rare. Good descriptions throughout and gradual reveal of who the mommy in question is
pjkaiser almost 3 years ago
The concept of giving birth terrifies me!
Do you do voice over work? If not, you should.
icypop almost 3 years ago